Correcting posts!!

This is the first version of one of my posts from last semester:

I think that blogs have been a very useful tool to practice writing because once you get to writing about things you like, you cannot stop expressing yourself! Blogs are also very fun since students can choose the design of their blogs. They can add pictures, choose the colours, attach images to the posts, post links of music videos, and so on. When I came into blogs’ world (WO), I was really disconnected with (WW) it since I hadn’t written on a blog before. I didn’t know how to write posts or how to add my friends’ blogs (WF) addresses. To be honest, I knew nothing about blogs, but when I was told how to make it work, I figured out that it was really easy. I rapidly engaged in blog use and from that moment onwards, writing has been an amazing experience. Besides all I’ve mentioned, anyone can write on a blog, and it’s not necessary to say who you are. As a consequence of this, everyone is free to express feelings, sensations, opinions, etc without having to be worried about being discriminated against. Of course, I imagine that blogs (WF) administrators can ban people because of what they say, but as long as you’re respectful and serious when writing, no problem should occur. Nevertheless, when being (“WW”) on the computer, there are always a lot of distractions. Sometimes, the temptations are (WM) great to resist. For example, to check e-mails, to get on messenger or another chat, to watch videos on you tube, etc. However, when being (WF) in class you have to concentrate on the tasks and avoid distractions. The idea is to get down to writing, thinking quickly, activating nerve cells, and improving writing skills of course. At the same time, the good and bad aspect of writing quickly, however, is that students are under pressure of time. Nonetheless, getting used to being under pressure helps people do things faster in life, doesn’t it?All in all, through writing on blogs, students can develop writing and reading skills, apart from developing a sense of criticism through correcting classmates’ blogs and reading our own blogs. Definitely, blogs have been really amazing!!

This is the new version:

I think that blogs have been a very useful tool to practice writing because once you get to writing about things you like, you cannot stop expressing yourself! Blogs are also very fun since students can choose the design of their blogs. They can add pictures, choose the colours, attach images to the posts, post links of music videos, and so on. When I came into the world of blogs, I was really disconnected from it since I hadn’t written on a blog before. I didn’t know how to write posts or how to add my friends’ blog addresses. To be honest, I knew nothing about blogs, but when I was told how to make it work, I figured out that it was really easy. I rapidly engaged in blog use and from that moment onwards, writing has been an amazing experience. Besides all I’ve mentioned, anyone can write on a blog, and it’s not necessary to say who you are. As a consequence of this, everyone is free to express feelings, sensations, opinions, etc without having to be worried about being discriminated against. Of course, I imagine that blog administrators can ban people because of what they say, but as long as you’re respectful and serious when writing, no problem should occur. Nevertheless, when working on the computer, there are always a lot of distractions. Sometimes, the temptations are too great to resist. For example, to check e-mails, to get on messenger or another chat, to watch videos on You tube, etc. However, when you are in class you have to concentrate on the tasks and avoid distractions. The idea is to get down to writing, thinking quickly, activating nerve cells, and improving writing skills of course. At the same time, the good and bad aspect of writing quickly, however, is that students are under pressure of time. Nonetheless, getting used to being under pressure helps people do things faster in life, doesn’t it?All in all, through writing on blogs, students can develop writing and reading skills, apart from developing a sense of criticism through correcting classmates’ blogs and reading our own blogs. Definitely, blogs have been really amazing!!