This is the first entry to be corrected:
"Analysing blogs"
I think that Bernardita’s blog is very well organized. It shows us pictures attached to most of the posts, and the topics are really interesting. I have been updated with some topics and pieces of news that she has written about. I also liked the picture she uploaded. Maybe, in terms of colouring the blog is a little bit dry. I mean, it could have more colouring (“wrong expression”) in order to make it more attractive to its readers. Besides the colouring (ww), I would like to see more informal vocabulary or maybe a more free (ww) way of expressing everything. She could also pay attention to including more links, of interviews, videos, or whatever is interesting for the audience (I think that posting links calls (ww) people’s attention). Apart from links, I would like to read more about internal thoughts, or more profound opinions on certain topics. However, as I said before, I think it is a good blog, well written and displayed!!
New version:
I think that Bernardita’s blog is very well organized. It shows us pictures attached to most of the posts, and the topics are really interesting. I have been updated with some topics and pieces of news that she has written about. I also liked the picture she uploaded. Maybe, in terms of colouring the blog is a little bit dry. I mean, it could be more colourful in order to make it more attractive to its readers. Besides the colour, I would like to see more informal vocabulary or maybe a freer way of expressing everything. She could also pay attention to including more links, of interviews, videos, or whatever is interesting for the audience (I think that posting links catches people’s attention). Apart from links, I would like to read more about internal thoughts, or more profound opinions on certain topics. However, as I said before, I think it is a good blog, well written and displayed!!
P.S: If you cannot see the words well, google "mistakes" (images) and you'll see them more clearly.
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